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VMKguy1
06-27-2010, 10:26 AM
Chapter 1

It was the middle of the night, I was sound asleep when I heard the sound of footsteps coming down the hallway. I woke up and looked at my bedroom door, when the hallway light came on and shined underneath it. I watched and wondered who it might be, I thought perhaps it was one of my siblings getting up to use the bathroom, or maybe one of my parents getting up. But I soon realized that it wasn't anyone in my house that turned the hallway light on. This person then walked directly in front of my door, and proceeded to open it. I was lying in my bed, paralyzed in fear when the door fully opened. I pretended to be asleep, but was still secretly watching. I saw a large silhouette standing in my doorway, I didn't know who they were, or what they wanted.
The man then said to me "I know where you are." I began panicking and sat up in my bed quickly to try and grab the phone in order to call the police. But the man was incredibly fast and grabbed me before I could get to the phone. He then threw me back onto my bed and held me down. I struggled but he was incredibly strong. The moonlight was shining into my bedroom through the window, and when the man leaned in, it illuminated his face. He was something out of a horror film, a true monster. His face was elongated, he had razor teeth, long, sharp nails, his skin was a light gray color, and his eyes were white, except for the pupil. He looked at me with a large, rather frightening smile, and said in a shrill voice "Hello, young man." He then opened his mouth, and exposed a horrific set of teeth, and proceeded to bite me on the shoulder. I gasped for air. The pain was so unbearable, I wanted to scream my lungs out, but I just couldn't. The man then let go of me, and slipped into the darkness of my room. The hallway light went out, and I was left on my bed, gasping for air, thinking I was going to die.
A few minutes past, and the pain suddenly slipped away, just like the man who caused it. I felt completely normal, no better, no worse than how I had felt the day before, but I did feel the need to sleep. I grew incredibly tired within just a few short seconds, and fell asleep fairly quickly. I woke up a few hours later, the sun was up but wasn't shining into my room yet, it was going to be a beautiful day. I got out of bed, thinking about the events that took place. I went to the bathroom and used it. I then thought about the possibility that it might have been all a dream, and that I was asleep the entire time. I then went over to the sink to wash my hands, looked into the mirror and saw some incredible changes to my face. My eyes were bright green, my skin was a light pale, and my hair was black. I then pulled my shirt down to look at my shoulder, and saw a large, but healed over bite mark. I put it all together, the man who appeared in my room last night had turned me into a Vampire.

Chapter 2

A million thoughts rushed into my head. Too many to recall. I then shut the bathroom curtains and sat on the floor tearing up. I thought about what would happen to me, how would I explain this, what was I going to do?
I was so confused and so afraid. My parents and siblings were already up, and I feared that if I went downstairs, I would lose all control and attack them. I then heard my mom yell up the stairs to me "We're going to go to the park for a few hours, do you want to come?" I then thought of a reply, and said "No, I think I'm gonna stay home..... I'm.. I'm not feeling very well." my mom than said "Do you think you'll be ok? Or do you need think I should stay here to help?" I then replied "No, I think I'll be fine, it's probably nothing. You guys can go, I'll be ok." My mom replied once more and said "Alright, just call me if you need anything. I love you!" I said back " Ok, I love you too!"
My parents and siblings then left, giving me time to think everything out.
I then went into my room, the sun was still not shining into my room, so I closed the curtains and sat on my bed. I sat there for quite a while, until I finally decided to leave. I wrote my family a very long note, explaining to them that I felt it would be best if I left, but I would return eventually.
I then packed up a backpack that I had, put on some sunglasses, my thickest clothing I had, and made sure that every part of me was covered.
I didn't know where to go, so I decided to just go to the hill tops. Nobody lived up there, there were large forests, and other things that would keep me safe.

Chapter 3

It took me hours to get to the hill tops, but when I finally made it, it was already nighttime. I walked through a forest, and started to become fairly scared. There were noises coming from all directions and I continuously saw shadows moving feet away from me. I then found a small pond and it looked like a safe place to stop and rest. So I put my backpack down, took off my sunglasses and the extra clothing I had on, and sat beside the pond, thinking about everything. I sat there for a few hours, when I started hearing the sound of sticks snapping, and tree branches moving around. I looked around, but could see absolutely nothing. I waited for something, or someone to appear, when I saw a figure several yards away. It was a woman, dressed in all white, with blond hair and light skin. She was beautiful, and she was walking toward me. I stood up and when the woman came close enough for me to see her fully, I asked "Who are you?" she smiled and replied "I am one of you." I looked at her and said "How do you know what I am?" She looked at me and said "I was like you once. Confused, heartbroken and afraid." She went on to explain how she became a Vampire as well, and things of that nature. We spoke to each other for hours while walking through the forest, when she asked me "Would you like to come to my house? I'll be able to tell you everything you want to know there." I was cautious, but I agreed to follow her. We walked for a few more minutes when we finally arrived to her home. It was a nice little house in the woods, was very modern for a woman who seemed to be from a very long time in the past. We went inside where she showed me her home, and told me that whatever was hers, is now mine as well.

What do you guys think of it so far? Let me know. :'D

Sparklezzz
06-27-2010, 10:34 AM
I like it :D

spacedogmike
06-27-2010, 10:42 AM
Uh I usually dont read stories On vfkf but i read this and I cant stop I CANT DESCRIBE IT IS AMAZINGLY GOOD YOUR AN Amazing writer, I cant wait till you right more I want more !!!!!! lol let me know when you right more (:

CaptHolly
06-27-2010, 10:54 AM
That was amazing!

VMKguy1
06-27-2010, 12:26 PM
I'll write more for you guys in a few hours (hopefully) Thanks for the support! :'D

VMKguy1
06-28-2010, 05:18 AM
Chapter 4
It was still the middle of the night, and we were walking through her house. She was showing me all the rooms, everything in the house that she used, and such. When we finally finished touring her house, she told me to come into the living room so that she could answer any questions I had. We walked into the living room and sat down next to the fireplace. I looked around the room and thought to myself "If I hadn't known any better, this house could completely pass off as any other normal home." The woman then looked at me and smiled, while proceeding to say "So, young man, have you any questions for me?" I sat there thinking of any questions I could ask her, and then I realized that I had yet to ask the simplest of questions, her name. I sat forward a little bit and asked "What is your name?" she still had the smile on her face and said "Well I am glad you asked this, I didn't want to remain a stranger in your eyes. My name is Scarlett." I then smiled shortly and proceeded to ask her more questions. She answered all of my questions quickly, kindly and without hesitation. It seemed as if she had no secrets to hold from me, she was completely honest. But for a strange reason, I felt that remaining cautious around her was the best thing to do right now. No matter how trustworthy she seemed at the moment something in my heart was telling me not to let me guard down. I then asked "How long have you been a Vampire for?" She sat back, and the smile went from an eager look, to a look of sorrow, or perhaps she was just deep in thought. She sat forward again and proceeded to tell me "It has been so long since that night. It's sometimes blurry when I think about it." I listened carefully to all the details of her story. She continued on to say "I was just 19 years old when it happened. I was walking through the streets of Paris, on my way to see the love of my life. It was the middle of the night, and I knew this time the streets were dangerous, but, I just had to see him. I remember walking along the empty streets, the echoing sound from my footsteps started to sound louder at one point. At first I thought nothing of it, so I continued to walk, but then the echoing was getting closer. So I stopped walking and waited. As I stood there, I became incredibly frightened. I was no longer walking, but I could still hear footsteps from behind me. I began to run down an ally way, looking for something to hide behind, or maybe a doorway to enter through. But all I found was a dead end. I crouched down against the wall, crying in fear, the footsteps could still be heard, when I saw a man's shadow walk in front of the ally way. He turned toward my direction, and started walking to me. Before I knew it, he was in front of me, with his hands around my neck, biting me." I sat there listening to this story, and I felt so much sorrow for her. This strange man had attacked her, and essentially made her abandon her loved ones. Just like I had to. I asked "How long ago did this happen?" She replied "135 years ago."

Chapter 5
For several years I lived with Scarlett. We never argued or disagreed on anything, we simply worked with each other to figure out solutions to simple problems, that would work for us both. I never fed on a human being, not once. I had thought about it of course, but just even the thought of it made me sick. I loathed the thought of taking another persons life, just to sustain mine. Scarlett always disappeared every now and then, in the middle of the night, and would always have the same excuse "I was in the forest."
With each day, I grew more and more suspicious of Scarlett, and what her intentions were. By this time, I knew it wasn't me just being nervous, considering how long I had known her.
I knew it was now time for me to leave. Later the next night, I informed Scarlett that I wished to leave her home, and experience the world for myself finally. I told her "I am grateful for everything you have provided me with. You have taken care of me for so long. But now, I feel that it is best if I finally go and live in the world as a Vampire for the first time. On my own." Scarlett stood with her back turned to me. I could clearly see her body tense up, her breathing became deep. She was changing before my eyes.
She then turned around and looked at me. Her eyes were completely white, her teeth were razor sharp, her face elongated. I looked at her in disbelief. This woman who I had come to know and trust, was not just a Vampire, but she was a replicator. She was the man who turned me this way. She is the cause of all of my troubles and sorrow. My eyes grew black, my teeth became like knives. Scarlett looked at me and smiled once again, and said those same words to me once more "Hello, young man."

Should I write some more, what do you guys think? :'D

Astrodizmagic
06-28-2010, 10:07 AM
yo this is one of my favorite stories on vfkf. if this was a book i would get it.

VMKguy1
06-28-2010, 06:34 PM
Thanks, if more of you guys would like me to write more, I'll definitely do it. :'D

CaptHolly
06-28-2010, 06:42 PM
Write More.

VMKguy1
07-12-2010, 12:53 AM
Bump.

ultrapinksubject
07-12-2010, 01:00 AM
scared me sitting here at 1 in the morning by myself. :o

LightRightAppple
07-12-2010, 01:14 AM
PLZ PLZ PLZ WRITE MORE :D plz it is like twilight but for a guy :D i think being a vampire would be kinda cool lol but yes please write like 10-20 more chapters :D lol please please i love twilight and write more lol

VMKguy1
07-12-2010, 03:09 AM
Lol, I will try some more in the morning for you guys. Thanks for the supports.

Sparklezzz
07-12-2010, 07:51 AM
Your an amazing writer wolf :)

Bluestormgirl
07-12-2010, 02:07 PM
Write more or.... I'll do something.
yeah.
*lame threat*
Just write more.

LightRightAppple
07-12-2010, 08:19 PM
are ya gonna write more :D

VMKguy1
07-14-2010, 08:23 PM
Chapter 6
Scarlett looked at me and laughed as if this was all just a game to her. She then said to me “You think you're going be able to kill me? Like you're going to be able to even touch me." Just then I reached around and threw a dining chair at her. She raised her arms and blocked her face and the chair collapsed after hitting her. Scarlett lowered her arms and looked at me and said "I think you just sealed your fate." She then screamed incredibly loud, she sounded like a wild animal being killed. She then stopped screaming and ran towards me, tackling me to the floor. I struggled to get her off of me, but she was constantly biting and scratching me. I managed to crawl my way over to the counter where and glass vase was. I tried pulling me self up so I can grab the vase, but Scarlett always managed to pull me back down. By this time I was injured, I knew if she continued to attack me, I wouldn't last much longer. I finally managed to get my hands on the vase, so I turned around as best as I could and smashed on her head. She released me and screamed, backing away. Before she could get too far, I grabbed the back of her dress and threw her against the wall, making a rather large hole in it. I then grabbed a writing desk and walked over to try and pin her to the floor with it. Before I could do that, she kicked my feet causing me to fall. The desk fell to the floor, and I was losing the fight. Scarlett climbed on top of me and raised her hand. She was just about to strike me in the face when I looked over and saw a piece of glass from a broken picture frame. Scarlett was waiting to strike, when she said “Ah, I have been waiting to kill you ever since the night I found your pitiful self in the woods. And now I finally can.” She smiled and just as she was about to strike me in the face, I picked up the piece of glass and cut her on the hand. She yelled and got off of me while holding her hand in pain. I stood up and looked at her, she looked up at me and screamed “I AM GOING TO KILL YOU!” She got up and ran toward me, she was close to grabbing me when I cut her on the arm and shoulder. She screamed and flailed her arms around, I turned around and threw the piece of glass at her, it hit her in the leg and got stuck there. Scarlett fell to the floor in pain. At this moment I couldn’t help but feel incredible guilt for doing this to her. I knew that she was trying to kill me, and that she was evil. But I still felt bad for doing this to the woman who took care of me for so long. I decided that I had done enough, so I said “I’m not going to kill you. I am going to let you stay here and suffer, while you think of all the evil things you have done.” I turned back and walked toward the door. I opened the door when Scarlett threw a large mirror at me. I moved to the side and it passed right by me. I then turned around and threw a large glass vase at her. It hit her in the head, knocking her out. I stood there for a minute to make sure she wasn’t just pretending, and when I knew she wasn’t going to get up in time to catch me, I left.

LightRightAppple
07-14-2010, 08:29 PM
wow that is great!!!! omg write more and more plz :) lol

VMKguy1
07-14-2010, 08:37 PM
I will. Chapter 6 was actually 2 separate chapters, but I wrote them in Microsoft word, so when I posted them on here, they were really short.

LightRightAppple
07-14-2010, 08:39 PM
lol yay i love your story like first one i read and omg if it was book i would want movie out of it :D

Astrodizmagic
07-14-2010, 09:10 PM
very awesome

VMKguy1
07-14-2010, 11:07 PM
Thank you everyone. If everybody likes it enough, I'll finish up this one, and then I'll really try to squeeze another book out of it. :DD

LightRightAppple
07-18-2010, 12:41 AM
I REALLY LIKE IT AND YES YES YES!!!! please write more :D

SparklinStitch
07-18-2010, 08:44 AM
WOOHOO. Your an AWESOME writer and i cant wait for your to write more...i love vampirate books and if this was a book i would totally buy it and read it!! Bring on chapter 6!!!

DuckSwimmer
07-18-2010, 09:07 AM
..this is like, an amazing story;p
you should write more wild[:

LightRightAppple
07-26-2010, 01:19 AM
WRITE more wolf! Lol :D please write more :)